Revise the Mirror Coast sample toward observation over editorial summary

3 files changed, 7 insertions, 7 deletions

diff --git a/content/world/cities/avenford.yaml b/content/world/cities/avenford.yaml
index 9ef17e4..00dc13c 100644
--- a/content/world/cities/avenford.yaml
+++ b/content/world/cities/avenford.yaml
@@ -4,4 +4,4 @@ display_name: Avenford
 population: 340000
 role: metropolis
 character: |
-  The region's metropolis, built on a long harbour that still carries shipping traffic at the north end and turned almost entirely residential at the south. The old quarter around the university and the press row is dense with bookshops, reading rooms, and small studios above shopfronts; the new financial district rises behind it in glass. Rents have been the subject of editorial columns for fifteen years running. The fog comes in most mornings and lifts by midday. The bridges are still the oldest-looking thing in town, cast iron kept painted a sober grey.
+  The region's metropolis, built on a long harbour that still carries shipping traffic at the north end and turned almost entirely residential at the south. The old quarter around the press row is dense with bookshops, reading rooms, and small studios above shopfronts; the new financial district rises behind it in glass. Rents have been the subject of editorial columns for fifteen years running. The fog comes in most mornings and lifts by midday. The bridges are the oldest-looking thing in town, cast iron kept painted a sober grey.
diff --git a/content/world/institutions/halfire_press.yaml b/content/world/institutions/halfire_press.yaml
index c55efca..e797dc7 100644
--- a/content/world/institutions/halfire_press.yaml
+++ b/content/world/institutions/halfire_press.yaml
@@ -4,4 +4,4 @@ city_id: avenford
 display_name: The Halfire Press
 kind: publisher
 character: |
-  The region's most storied literary publisher. Older than anyone working there, passed down through four families in succession, independent through every consolidation wave. Operates out of three floors of a narrow Avenford townhouse with a street-level reading room open to anyone. Publishes around thirty titles a year — literary fiction, essays, and a small philosophy list kept alive more from principle than profit. Its imprint is recognised across the world, and turning down an offer from Halfire is a kind of minor career milestone in itself. Rights to copy-edit are fought over. The editor-in-chief writes a column for the Sunday papers that no one important admits to reading.
+  An old literary publisher in Avenford. Older than anyone working there, passed down through four families in succession, independent through every consolidation wave. Operates out of three floors of a narrow townhouse with a street-level reading room open to anyone. Publishes around thirty titles a year — literary fiction, essays, and a small philosophy list kept alive more from principle than profit. Its imprint is recognised across the world, and turning down an offer from Halfire is a kind of minor career milestone in itself. Rights to copy-edit are fought over. The editor-in-chief writes a column for the weekend papers that no one important admits to reading.
diff --git a/content/world/regions/mirror_coast.yaml b/content/world/regions/mirror_coast.yaml
index bd843d4..fda3012 100644
--- a/content/world/regions/mirror_coast.yaml
+++ b/content/world/regions/mirror_coast.yaml
@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ climate:
   annual_rainfall_mm: 1180
 
 economy:
-  summary: The intellectual and creative heart of the world. Publishing, universities, design studios, the old shipping trade, and a finance industry that quietly funds most of it.
+  summary: Publishing, universities, design studios, the old shipping trade, and a finance industry that quietly funds most of it.
   dominant_sectors:
     - publishing
     - education
@@ -20,10 +20,10 @@ economy:
 culture:
   summary: Cosmopolitan, literate, liberal-leaning, secularised.
   texture: |
-    People here read. They argue in cafes about things no one else cares about, they know which essay ran in which magazine last month, and they pretend not to care about the weather while building their lives around it. The region prides itself on being tolerant and is visibly less so about money. Old money keeps quiet; new money is loud; the working class is getting priced out of every neighbourhood that remembers it. Under everything, a gentle fog of self-regard.
+    People here read. They argue in cafés about things no one else cares about, know which essay ran in which magazine last month, carry second pairs of shoes to work in the rainy season. Rents go up every quarter. The working class is getting priced out of the old port wards. New money buys the corner buildings and paints them.
 
 class_texture: |
-  Sharp inequality with a polite face. The professional class is comfortable and tired. The working class is hanging on in the old port wards and the inland mill towns. Real poverty, mostly hidden, sits in single-room occupancies above the shops and in the long-term rentals of the old dock neighbourhoods.
+  The professional class is comfortable and tired. The working class is hanging on in the old port wards and the inland mill towns. Real poverty sits in single rooms above the shops, in long-stay rentals down by the docks, visible mostly to those who live there.
 
 religion:
   covenant: 0.25
@@ -41,5 +41,5 @@ institution_ids:
   - lightwater_university
 
 stereotypes:
-  held_by_others: Snobs. Pricing everyone out of housing. Rude in restaurants. Read too many books. Actually, pretty nice if you get to know them.
-  self_image: We're sophisticated, literate, and put-upon by the rest of the country's resentment. We built the publishing industry, the universities, the shipping trade. The fog is ours.
+  held_by_others: Snobs. Pricing everyone out of housing. Rude in restaurants. Read too many books. Pretty nice if you get to know them.
+  self_image: Sophisticated. Literate. Put upon by everyone else's resentment. Built the publishing houses, the universities, the shipping trade. The fog is ours.